Cloud Faith
The yonder cloud
In azul sky
The earth doth shroud
And soothe the eye.
It drifts with ease
And does not know
Will make it go.
It does not doubt
Its makers hand
Will guide its route
Through thirsty land
And cause the rain
That poureth out
To heal the plain
And quench the drought.
It isn't there
To simply be;
It has a God
Like you and me.
We are often so tied up in life's worries and affairs, we forget simple faith in God. Those who are saved by the blood of Jesus Christ are the children of God, and can trust him to provide for them and to accomplish his will in their lives.
Matthew 6:25-34 is a relevant passage.
That is a very beautiful poem! The message is great, but the rhyme and rhythm are also good. I have written several poems, but I am not good at writing poetry. If you'd like, I can post one of mine here. It's about Jesus Christ and salvation. I like writing, but I do not like English class. I have written several essays and compositions, usually on Biblical themes. BTW, I have been following your blog, so someone else is reading it. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much! I'm glad you like it. You may certainly post a poem here. I'd love to read it.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad your following. It's always funner blogging when you have an audience. I'll definitively check out your own blog.
Amen! It's a shame that we so often forget that our help is always right there, and try to fix our problems ourselves!
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing!
Your welcome!
ReplyDeleteI haven't forgotten about posting the poem, but I'm still hunting for it. Fact is, I wrote it out in the middle of a yellow line pad, and now I can't find it! :0
ReplyDeleteI will post it when I find it, though. Thanks again for sharing this beautiful poem!
Your welcome! Can't wait to see it.
ReplyDeleteHere is my poem! My mom had taken it to post on her blog. If my poems (of which I have many) are to be published, I'd rather it be posthumously. :)
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The angels brought good tidings
Of peace to every man.
But to those who will not believe,
To *** they will be damned!
For the Babe in the manger
Has now become a man.
He's standing, interceding;
At His Father's own right hand.
He died upon the cross for you,
To give life eternally.
But the Lake of Fire is the lot
Of those who won't believe.
Oh, my friend I beg you,
Trust Jesus Christ today!
He's ready to receive you,
Oh, don't hesitate, I pray!
~ “Cowboy” Nick A.
Sorry for being so late. Haven't checked the blog in a few days. I've been busy finishing up the 50,000 words.
ReplyDeleteWow! That's quite good, methinks. You have a good but comfortably loose alternating pattern of word count. I always look for that kind of thing. I'm no fan of so called "free verse". I like an easily recognizable pattern in poetry.
But, having slight differentiation adds a layer of humanity and complexity to it. Perhaps some warmth, and unpredictability. It is often just as delightful as it's strict and measured counterpart, which can sometimes seem cold and detached. So I think you did that very well.
Besides that, your rhyming is good too, and, of course, the message is simple yet essential. I like the way you end it. You resolve it cleanly, hitting the point home with the power that only poetry can offer. I do seem to have trouble with that sometimes.
If I may offer some constructive criticism on one aspect. I think your poem would flow much more easily, and make a more "resonant" statement at the end if you had a stricter rhythm. I'm finding it a little difficult to keep up with it, so I find myself thinking less on the message and more on the structure. I suppose they call it "meter" or "feet".
But, other than that, I love it! Thanks for posting that. I hope you write more. I'd like to read it.
Thanks! Fact is, I don't really understand that kind of stuff. If you wanted to modify my poem to have stricter rhythm, I might be able to get the idea.
ReplyDeleteThanks again!
(I joke that I focus on the message because I am not good at PC (Poetic Correctness) =)
~"Cowboy" Nick
Would you be able to explain feet and meter? I've heard it's where you put extra effort into the syllable, but I put extra effort into some syllables when I am singing, because I like that particular part of the song. For example: "...came and brought TO ME THE VICTORY." So I can't pick out which are the accented / stressed syllables.
ReplyDeleteI meant to say this on the last one, but I have written lots more, just not thrilled about putting it where everyone can see it, though. :)
ReplyDeleteIf you like, I can email some to you, though.
Well sure. You can email them to me at Noogahpenguin@yahoo.com
ReplyDeleteI have no business explaining feet to you. I'm not very concise on their definitions and workings.
I recommend reading this article:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Metre_(poetry)
This is also good:
http://www.cummingsstudyguides.net/xmeter.html
Thanks! I'll check those out. You might want to remove your email address as spambots can obtain it as long as it is posted. I'll dig some up and email them to you.
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